English A
9/28/10
Essay #3
I Am
An Essay about Metaphors
Have you ever looked at someone and thought something like,"That guy is a slug." This guy is not a slug,of course,but he may act like one. This world is filled with similarities between people,objects,or creatures. These similarities are not just you judging yourself, but also the world picking out similar features you might have that connect you to something based on who you are.
(TS)Everyone in the world is like a different thing that they are actually not; I am a pillow in my mind. I may not actually be a pillow, but pillows and I have a lot in common. (SD)First pillows make you relax. (CM) Pillows are soft and do not fight with you and your comfort while you are resting; I too do not make people fight to maintain their comfort when they are around me. (CM)Also pillows will not leave you if you have trouble relaxing. They will stay were they are no matter what and so will I. (SD) Pillows, particularly ones made out of memory foam, absorb you in there foam. (CM) I personally do not absorb anything but I do absorb every word that you say to me and store it in my library of thoughts and facts for later. (CM)I have many facts from different friends and family that I have stored in my memory because they are important to the people so when they are sad I can say a joke they like, or some other thing. (SD) Also like a pillow I am indestructible. (CM)Pillows can take any punch you can give to them; they just sort of fill in the dent and move on. (CM) I too can fill in the dent of anger if someone is mean and move on with my life. (TS) This paragraph describes how I am like a pillow in many ways; but it doesn’t mean you can put your head on me.
I like pillows so naturally I thought of myself as a pillow.I could have thought of myself being a dog or lizard. I hope you see how you can use metaphors to compare things. But remember don't make fun of what people think they are like. You wouldn't want someone calling you "Dirt Clod" now would you.
My one writing issue is that sometimes I make careless mistakes by not reading over well. I also think my one strong point is my my CS in my body paragraph. My one weak spot thought is my topic sentences. I would give myself a B-
Tuesday, September 28, 2010
Wednesday, September 22, 2010
The Stranger: an Essay About Strangeness
English A
Essay #2
9/22/10
You are walking down the street near your house and you see a lady with funky clothes walking down the street, or a man whose eyes seem to see all in their squint eyed fashion. These are some of the examples of people who might seem a little odd. This is an essay describing a strange person that I have met. What I am going to tell you about this person is probably going to surprise you. Or you may think, “He doesn’t sound that much different than me.”
(TS)Have you ever felt like someone on your street is, well, a little bit strange? You are not alone; I have met many weird people too. The most memorable person is near my aunt and uncle's house.(SD)This odd person ,surprisingly, I have only seen a few times.(CM)This is because this elusive person never goes out of his house when people are around.(CM)Sometimes you can see him peering through the curtains from the dark reaches of his house, and when you look his way he seemingly melts into the shadows of his dim lit house.(SD)Also his house is a fairly descent size, with a nice glass dining area over looking the pond.(CM)Of course you'll never see this person outside.(CM)This is totally inexplicable since it is so nice out there; I haven't seen him have one party out on his deck.(SD)To wrap this all up, this person has flocks of geese at his house.(CM)It is like he keeps them.They are all over his lawn doing whatever they please.(CM)When I was little one of the geese attacked me for some bread that I had for the ducks, not a good experience.(CS)All together this person across the pond is strange indeed, but maybe not as strange as you and I.
Overall this essay described one peculiar guy. But maybe this guy is thinking how funny I am, always down by the pond staring like some psychopathic bird waiting to catch a fish or frog. Some of the people, who you think is different, may not be different in a bad way .Next time you think someone strange, think about if they are strange in a good way or a bad. After all it is not at all that bad to be the one who is different.
Essay #2
9/22/10
You are walking down the street near your house and you see a lady with funky clothes walking down the street, or a man whose eyes seem to see all in their squint eyed fashion. These are some of the examples of people who might seem a little odd. This is an essay describing a strange person that I have met. What I am going to tell you about this person is probably going to surprise you. Or you may think, “He doesn’t sound that much different than me.”
(TS)Have you ever felt like someone on your street is, well, a little bit strange? You are not alone; I have met many weird people too. The most memorable person is near my aunt and uncle's house.(SD)This odd person ,surprisingly, I have only seen a few times.(CM)This is because this elusive person never goes out of his house when people are around.(CM)Sometimes you can see him peering through the curtains from the dark reaches of his house, and when you look his way he seemingly melts into the shadows of his dim lit house.(SD)Also his house is a fairly descent size, with a nice glass dining area over looking the pond.(CM)Of course you'll never see this person outside.(CM)This is totally inexplicable since it is so nice out there; I haven't seen him have one party out on his deck.(SD)To wrap this all up, this person has flocks of geese at his house.(CM)It is like he keeps them.They are all over his lawn doing whatever they please.(CM)When I was little one of the geese attacked me for some bread that I had for the ducks, not a good experience.(CS)All together this person across the pond is strange indeed, but maybe not as strange as you and I.
Overall this essay described one peculiar guy. But maybe this guy is thinking how funny I am, always down by the pond staring like some psychopathic bird waiting to catch a fish or frog. Some of the people, who you think is different, may not be different in a bad way .Next time you think someone strange, think about if they are strange in a good way or a bad. After all it is not at all that bad to be the one who is different.
Thursday, September 16, 2010
Frestyle wring #2
I am sitting in my room watching my gecko, and watching their peculiar ways. First of all they have a big smile on their face ,or so it seem,and they always seem to have a good time.They also walk hilariously like they they are dancing. Geckos,specifically leopard geckos, live in the moment; they are extremely care free and just lie there in their rock and sleep for what seems like a eternity. When I take them out to stretch there legs they seem to say, "Sure, why not?". I think personally that they must have exceptional hearing because, this could be really nasty to some, their ears are holes in the side of their head. "Yes you can see out the other side of there head." Leopard geckos could be called the 'Dogs of the Lizard World'.First they will lick your hands. Then when excited they wag there tail really fast. They also like to be rubbed on the head,"Creepy I know." They don't really bark but they will growl,which sounds like someone gargling water, which is pretty cool.This is really all I can tell you for now, so long.
Wednesday, September 15, 2010
Lost & Found
Jordan
English 8A
9/14/10
1st paragraph
The Lost Summer
An essay about a song and school
When people first hear a song they usually jump at the easiest answer to what the song is talking about. The Lost Summer is about the song Lost & Found. The song Lost and Found is about a rapper talking about losing and gaining things. This is slightly different than how I heard it, which is a little strange but maybe you might see it my way after you read this essay.
(TS)The song Lost & Found can be viewed in many ways. (SD)How I viewed it was about summer and school.(CM)If you dig through the outer layer of this song's crust you can see that summer is lost and school is found.(CM)Also when we are playing at home during the summer we think about how we are going to lose this when we go back to school.(SD)When we start school we find a whole lot of things that we have forgotten.(CM)Like some of us may have forgotten how to do something in Math or English.(CM)But when we get back to school its like, “Wow, I once new how to do that.”(SD)Also when school starts we want to get back to summer vacation or vice versa. (CM)When you are in school you can’t wait to get out; then on summer vacation we want to see our friends at school again. (CM) Then when school starts we say,“ Already?”, when we want this freedom of summer to never end(CS) This is how it will always be; we will lose and find school and summer for along time.
The summer is lost but the school is found. That is how I had interpreted this song; maybe you might have another idea of how this song relates to another subject. I hope you all see what I was trying to show you. Some of these feelings about summer and school are mine; some of the feelings are from my friends. Next time you hear some songs think about if they have a double meaning.
English 8A
9/14/10
1st paragraph
The Lost Summer
An essay about a song and school
When people first hear a song they usually jump at the easiest answer to what the song is talking about. The Lost Summer is about the song Lost & Found. The song Lost and Found is about a rapper talking about losing and gaining things. This is slightly different than how I heard it, which is a little strange but maybe you might see it my way after you read this essay.
(TS)The song Lost & Found can be viewed in many ways. (SD)How I viewed it was about summer and school.(CM)If you dig through the outer layer of this song's crust you can see that summer is lost and school is found.(CM)Also when we are playing at home during the summer we think about how we are going to lose this when we go back to school.(SD)When we start school we find a whole lot of things that we have forgotten.(CM)Like some of us may have forgotten how to do something in Math or English.(CM)But when we get back to school its like, “Wow, I once new how to do that.”(SD)Also when school starts we want to get back to summer vacation or vice versa. (CM)When you are in school you can’t wait to get out; then on summer vacation we want to see our friends at school again. (CM) Then when school starts we say,“ Already?”, when we want this freedom of summer to never end(CS) This is how it will always be; we will lose and find school and summer for along time.
The summer is lost but the school is found. That is how I had interpreted this song; maybe you might have another idea of how this song relates to another subject. I hope you all see what I was trying to show you. Some of these feelings about summer and school are mine; some of the feelings are from my friends. Next time you hear some songs think about if they have a double meaning.
Thursday, September 9, 2010
Freestyle writing
When you think about it writing is like birds.Like birds they can fly freely and have endless types of letters.The letters take place of the feathers which help the birds fly and with a sentence the letters help it fly too.Like birds they need wings to attach the feathers, this is why we have words to help power the sentence, and to make it a sentence. Last is the sentence which for a bird is a nice strong body. This is how I think writing is like birds. Some people may think sentences are like other animals, but I think they are like birds.
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