Main Point or Thesis of Essay loneliness
Bell word Lonely
Paragraph 1 -- Opening
Hook: Everyone in life will, or already has, been lonely.
Comment on the hook: People can feel lonely even around people me, Dill.
Comment on the hook: In lonely places me, Dill
Thesis (with bell word) Being lonely is bad but when you’re finally not you feel joyful.
Paragraph 2
TS (Main Idea, Topic, or Thesis) Dill’s loneliness
2 Echo words to be used: Abandoned seclusion
SD: Dill said his parents would play with him
CM: Bought a lot of toys but expected him to just play with them
CM Dill said his parents “just wasn’t interested in me”
SD: Thought that they liked a secluded life
CM: Said “they stayed gone all the time”
CM: didn’t acknowledge him being there
CS: overall Dill had a very lonely stay at his parents house
Paragraph 3
TS (Main Idea, Topic, or Thesis) I feel lonely sometimes
2 Echo words to be used: lonesome lost
SD: when I am alone in my house
CM: I watch a movie or play a game
CM: read a book
SD: At huge parties
CM: Don’t know anyone there
CM: I am a shy person
CS: The best feeling though is when someone comes who I know
Paragraph 4
Hook (the same as paragraph 1, or different) Everyone in life will, or already has, been lonely
Echo word (could be bell word) lonely
Comment on the hook: Dills loneliness
Comment on the hook: My loneliness
Re-statement, in slightly different words, of the thesis: Every one enjoys the moment that someone comes and they are no longer lonely.
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