I Am

English A
9/28/10
Essay #3

I Am
An Essay about Metaphors
Have you ever looked at someone and thought something like,"That guy is a slug." This guy is not a slug,of course,but he may act like one. This world is filled with similarities between people,objects,or creatures. These similarities are not just you judging yourself, but also the world picking out similar features you might have that connect you to something based on who you are.
(TS)Everyone in the world is like a different thing that they are actually not; I am a pillow in my mind. I may not actually be a pillow, but pillows and I have a lot in common. (SD)First pillows make you relax. (CM) Pillows are soft and do not fight with you and your comfort while you are resting; I too do not make people fight to maintain their comfort when they are around me. (CM)Also pillows will not leave you if you have trouble relaxing. They will stay were they are no matter what and so will I. (SD) Pillows, particularly ones made out of memory foam, absorb you in there foam. (CM) I personally do not absorb anything but I do absorb every word that you say to me and store it in my library of thoughts and facts for later. (CM)I have many facts from different friends and family that I have stored in my memory because they are important to the people so when they are sad I can say a joke they like, or some other thing. (SD) Also like a pillow I am indestructible. (CM)Pillows can take any punch you can give to them; they just sort of fill in the dent and move on. (CM) I too can fill in the dent of anger if someone is mean and move on with my life. (TS) This paragraph describes how I am like a pillow in many ways; but it doesn’t mean you can put your head on me.
I like pillows so naturally I thought of myself as a pillow.I could have thought of myself being a dog or lizard. I hope you see how you can use metaphors to compare things. But remember don't make fun of what people think they are like. You wouldn't want someone calling you "Dirt Clod" now would you.
My one writing issue is that sometimes I make careless mistakes by not reading over well. I also think my one strong point is my my CS in my body paragraph. My one weak spot thought is my topic sentences. I would give myself a B-