By now you have probably been experiencing a sense of powerful authority and decreasing shyness. This is because I have taken your childhood and I am only giving it back for a price. Without your childhood all your misunderstandings of the world will be practically gone. These misunderstandings are sometimes a great thing so you will defiantly miss these. Scout in To Kill a Mockingbird did not understand the adults’ fusses about people and overall just understood that you should just treat everyone equally. When everyone was angry at Tom Robinson she was one of few people who did not accuse him off anything .This is just like how I hardly understand you yet I kidnapped your childhood. Being mature is a thing that should not be taken with a grain of salt. As a mature human you are expected to be able to detect right from wrong. This is probably the most unreasonable job since everyone’s heart and mind works differently and what some may think is wrong others may think is may. This problem is why there are so many conflicts among the mature. So in a way I am helping you become mature. But I also am helping you realize that you don’t want to grow up too fast. When it is time to you will, of course, grow up since not growing up is just in fairy tales, though the lost boys are still trying to pay my ransom for their maturity back.
Dear Jordan,
ReplyDeleteExcellent Work! I love these two sentences [ By now you have probably been experiencing a sense of powerful authority and decreasing shyness. This is because I have taken your childhood and I am only giving it back for a price.] because you really made the reader believe that you had stolen something of value from another person. This sentence [This is probably the most unreasonable job since everyone’s heart and mind works differently and what some may think is wrong others may think is may.] is a little bit confusing because I think that you meant to say right instead of may at the end of the sentence, but I think that this might haven been a typo. Also, in this sentence [ So in a way I am helping you become mature.] I think you should find another word that means mature in the Thesaurus because you said mature in the last sentence and you don't want it to sound too repetitive. Great Job!
-Kara